读后续写：索道惊魂 讲义+课件+习作赏析（人与自我个人成长Word版）.docx

读后续写：索道惊魂一、题目MsJohnsonwillneverforgetChelsea,awoundedsoul.OvertheyearsChelseahadalwaysstruggled,bothacademicallyandwithself-confidence.Additionally,hermotherhaddiedafteraheroicbattlewithaterminalillnesswhenChelseawasafifthgrader.Asshebeganhersixthgrade,Chelseawasstillhurting.MsJohnsonworriedaboutherwithgoodreason.Eachfall,Ms.Johnsontakesthestudentsforafive-dayadventureatWolfRidge,anenvironmentallearningcenterinthewoodsofNorthernMinnesotaoverlooking1.akeSuperior.Theweekisfilledwithlearning,teambuilding,andovercomingseeminglyimpossiblechallenges.TheygoinOctober,andtheturningleavesoftreescometosymbolizethechangeshappeningtothestudentsovertheweek.ThestepsandgrowthstudentsmakeatWolfRidgebecomeametaphorMs.Johnsonusesthroughouttheyearasherstudentsfacechallengesintheclassroom.ThemostdifficultactivityistheHighAdventureRopesCourse,whichstretchesfromtowertotowerhighamongestthetreetopsfortyfeetabovetheground.Ms.JohnsonknewthisexperiencewouldbeparticularlydifficultforChelsea.Whenitwastimeforhertofastentheharness（安全带），Chelseawasalreadytrembling.Theharnessoffersphysicalprotection,butnotmuchmentalcomfortwhennothingbutaslipperyboardoranunsteadywireisbetweenyourfeetandthegroundfarbelow.ChelseasteppedhesitantlyontotheSwingingWoodBridge,andonlyaftertheinstructor'sencouragement,slowlymadeherwayacrossitsshakyboardsuptothefirsttower.WiththesupportofaChaPerone（监护人）stationedthere,shebeganherwayacrosstheBurmaBridge,madeofmerelythreewiresandstraps.Hertremblingbodyaddedtoitsshaking.Fromdownbelow,hergroundpartnersshoutedupSupportively,Comeon,Chelsea,you'redoinggreat!Chelseafinallyreachedthesecondtowerandeventuallysteppedoutontothenextchallengeandslowlyinchedherwayacross.Paral:Nowshefacedwhatformanyisthemostdifficultactivity:theSingleWire.Pare2:Thefinalchallengeisazipline(滑索),whichrequiresleapingoffthelasttowerandslidingtotheground.1.woundedadj.受伤的11.nothingbut只有2.academicallyadv.学业上12.slippery,slPOTiZadj.滑的3.aheroicbattle英勇的斗争13.unsteadyadj.不稳的4.aterminalillness绝症14.hesitantly迟疑地；踌躇地5.withgoodreason有充分的理由15.makeone,sway刖进6.overlookV.俯瞰16.stationVt.派驻7.symbolizesimbolaiz/v.象征17.strap/strasp/n.带子8.metaphormet0f(r)n.隐喻,18.inchone,sway慢慢地走过去象征across9.stretchstretv.延伸19.leapoff.从跳下10.fasten,fa：s（o）nv.扣紧；系牢20.slidetotheground滑到地面二、审题思考1 .原文中共出现了几个主要人物？（2个，Chelsea+MsJohnson）2 .前文情节中第一次成功的原因是什么？I（同学鼓励）3 .两段续写都是在描写开始闯关到成功的过程，怎么写的不一样？即，应该把侧重点放在什么上？答：成功原因是不一样的。第一次是老师鼓励，第二次是自己主动迎接挑战。暗线是自信心的重建过程。为什么会有这个重建？第二段她想到了什么才会这么坚定？因为想到了自己的妈妈的勇敢。三、微情节设计Paral:Nowshefacedwhatformanyisthemostdifficultactivity:theSingleWire.Pare2:Thefinalchallengeisazipline（滑索）,whichrequiresleapingoffthelasttowerandslidingtotheground.第一段：（1）她：害怕（2）老师：鼓励（3）她：闯关成功第二Tl(1)1.摇摇晃晃的单索道theunsteadysinglewire她：一开2.极度的恐惧desperatefear始害怕，3.下意识地subconsciously但是想4.后退一步inchastepbackward到妈妈5.察觉到sense就充满6.恐惧和恐慌nterrorandpanic力7.意识到perceive(2)8.处于放弃的边缘ontheedgeofgivingup她闯量9.克服overcomeIB10.发出支持的呼喊letoutasupportiveshout(3)11.她鼓起了全部勇气pluckedupallhercourage他人：12.手心冒汗palmssweat(ed)i她鼓13.两腿发抖legsshiver(ed)掌(4)14.努力做某事endeavourtodosth影响15.调整呼吸adjustone,sbreath16.与病魔搏斗struggltofightthedisease四、17.XX在她脑海中闪现XXflash(ed)intohermind教师下18.激发某人做某事的坚强意志fuelsb,sstrongwilltodosth水文短19.战胜她面前的挑战conquerthechallengesbeforeher语20.下定决心makearesolution(todosth)21.勇敢的courageousko'reid3ss/22.被包围besurroundedby23.雷鸣般的掌声thunderousapplause24.回荡echo五、连词成篇Paral:(1)切尔西一看到那根摇摇晃晃的单索道，她就感到极度的恐惧和焦虑，下意识地后退了一步。Theinstanttheunsteadysinglewirecameintohersight,desperatefearandanxietysurgedthroughChelseaandsheinchedastepbackwardsubconsciously.(2)约翰逊女士察觉到小女孩的恐惧和恐慌，意识到她正处于放弃的边缘。Sensingherterrorandpanic,MsJohnsonperceivedthatthelittlegirlwasontheedgeofgivingup.(3)“切尔西，与你已经克服的事情相比，这次挑战根本不算什么!”你会成功的!”约翰逊女士从下面发出了支持的呼喊。uChelsea,thischallengeisnothingcomparedtowhatyouhavealreadyovercome!Youcouldmakeit!”MsJohnsonletoutasupportiveshoutfrombelow.(4)犹豫了一会儿，她鼓起了全部勇气，踩上索道，最终到达了最后一座塔。Havinghesitatedforawhile,shepluckedupallhercourage,steppingontothewireandultimatelyreachingthelasttower.Para2:(1)切尔西手心冒汗，两腿发抖，努力调整着呼吸。Palmssweatingandlegsshivering,Chelseaendeavouredtoadjustherbreath.(2)母亲与病魔搏斗的画面在她脑海中闪现，这让她想起了母亲是多么勇敢，激发了她战胜面前挑战的坚强意志。Imagesofhermother,sstrugglingtofightthediseaseflashedintohermind,whichremindedherofhowbravehermotherwasandfueledherstrongwilltoconquerthechallengesbeforeher.(3)下定决心后，她勇敢而坚定地跳下了塔。Havingmadearesolution,sheleaptoffthetower,courageousanddetermined.(4)她刚安全着陆，同学们就把她团团围住了，雷鸣般的掌声在好几英里的树林里回荡。Scarcelyhadshelandedsafelyonthegroundwhenshewassurroundedbyherclassmates,thunderousapplauseechoingthroughthetreesformiles.六、学生优作赏析三*HW*jX域内作餐.高二书面褰达谷题蛾姓名：currentsOUius05ZQUIderhQ想出焦色矩形山根限定区域的答案无效I一JUsheaCee1.nhaOiQogIMthe.2nastdfficulnI一ln-r1.ofher©asaShaksJeI上。4上”一1.urbuleat.Ir-iawJierSh1.eaJ3dKir史拉物到/he一1.QSsheku.，heuthroo1.1thtea£f1.anda1.ehk.jof夕/”'"upcometoherirtiadCfturin-CIhgidS1.lqohnsoaeJIedotherModeramied“Qiue，'Ctrup一-Xaucan-makAftEnrawagedby外wCCrin9tporher.tha3undfdsoul1-plucktt1.1.aherCO1.Ir%*QndOndocvoredtofcKrhefirst工tB?ISfwpby"平SIUioUadedhgcontinuous&imul«ZIiOnrShPSrO州&1-'tothe/0TOder'"C九y."hefna/ChCuQCgaIVazipIfCe,皿htchre,uireiIonPi好TheSafOWfifcd¢/M夕f。rh?ground.ThrcughfhoPreVCOU48peHsE,Cholbuilthor*p'f-ConfidQnrpQGd"arnoIOngerCrQPtintoherAe。/¼ThQSlghecthamipn,ShBgrabbedrhero>andIQaPtHfrhe%YfiT犯，”AHy.SCarCelyhadSbP9crft)。geundWhenMeconveyedherheartfeltgratitudetoAJt)hmandherCIWmafes.ftetheadgntaWhaneaortheyCCEeacrossSnmRchallenge,/4.Zatf:StPPSOlMgrowth皿h；ChtheyhadmadeatW叫RM弊QSGJee岬tn，Pirechmfohaa/±heOiiSfaChIt>V8rhe"。Venf/Ar1.学生佳作短语1.低头bowone,shead2.湍急的水流turbulentcurrents3.喉咙发紧one,sthroattighten(ed)主动4.心中有了的念头Aetoone,smind5.用坚定的声音inadeterminedvoice6.摇摇晃晃地走向staggerto7.她的内心不再恐惧。fearnolongercreptintoherheart.8.毫不犹豫地Withouttheslightesthesitation9.顺利地smoothly10.她向某人表达衷心的感谢conveyedherheartfeltgratitudetosb11.遇到一些难关encountersomehurdles12.迎接挑战risetothechallenges13.帮助某人做某事assistsbindoingsth14.磨练意志力buildupwillpower学生佳作内容赏析Paral:Nowshefacedwhatformanyisthemostdifficultyactivity:theSingleWire.(1)在她面前有一根悬在空中的颤抖的索道。她低下头，却看见湍急的水流。她的喉咙发紧，心里有了放弃的念头。Infrontofherwasashakingsinglewirehangingintheair.Shebowedherhead,onlyforturbulentcurrentsofthe1.akeSuperiortocomeintohersight.Herthroattightenedandathoughtofgivingupcometohermind.(2)约翰逊捕捉到了切尔西的犹豫，用坚定的声音对她喊道:“振作起来！你能做到的！”CapturingChclsea,shesitation,MsJohnsonyelledatherinadeterminedvoice,uCheerup!Youcanmakeit!”(3)在体贴的老师的鼓励下，这个受伤的灵魂鼓起了所有的勇气，努力迈出了第一步。一步一步，在不断的鼓励中，她成功地摇摇晃晃地爬上了最后一座塔。Encouragedbythecaringteacher,thewoundedsoulpluckedupallhercourageandendeavoredtotakethefirststep.Stepbystep,surroundedbycontinuousencouragement,shestaggeredtothelasttowersuccessfully.Para2:Thefinalchallengeisazipline,whichrequiresleapingoffthelasttowerandslidingtotheground.(1)通过之前的经历，切尔西建立了自信，她的内心不再恐惧。Throughthepreviousexperiences,Chelseabuiltherself-confidenceandfearnolongercreptintoherheart.(2)她毫不犹豫地抓住绳子，顺利地跳下了塔。她刚落地，就向约翰逊女士和她的同学表达了衷心的感谢。Withouttheslightesthesitation,shegrabbedtheropeandleaptoffthetowersmoothly.ScarcelyhadshegottothegroundwhensheconveyedherheartfeltgratitudetoMsJohnsonandherclassmates.(3)在这次冒险之后，每当他们遇到一些难关时，约翰逊女士就会用他们在沃尔夫岭所取得的进步和成长作为隐喻，激励他们迎接挑战。这件有意义的事情，不仅治愈了一个受伤的灵魂，而且帮助学生磨练了意志。Aftertheadventure,whenevertheyencounteredsomehurdles,MsJohnsonwouldusethestepsandgrowthwhichtheyhadmadeatWalfRidgeasametaphortoinspirethemtorisetothechallenges.ItwastherewardingeventthatnotOnlyhealedawoundedsoulbutassistedstudentsinbuildingupwillpowerasWel1.