专题01 读后续写速成：“天龙八步”法.docx

读后续写速成:“天龙八步”法目录：第1部分第2部分八步法实战应用：高考真题讲解情绪描写进一步 解释描写事情似乎有 了转机，并 抱有希望， 感到砍慰S点题, 呼应前文突然有了一个 想法（一句话 说明这个想法）个人的努力或借陟外界但是问叁还未解决或出现了新问题过段时间，事情有了最后的转折情绪细节转折转机失望想法结局总结注意：这八步并不是固定的，可以不按这个顺序，也可以省略一些环节。读后续写，大部分都是围绕COnfIiCt,solution来运转的，首先你能看懂材料，如果这一步无法完成,那这篇文章并不适合你。然后，你要找到文章到底提出什么冲突或问题。大部分文章都是这个模式:情绪：消极情绪细节：进一步解释描写转折，个人的努力或借助外界(4)转机：事情似乎有了转机，并抱有希望，感到欣慰失望，但是问题还是没有解决或出现了新问题(6)新法：突然有了一个想法(一句话说明这个想法)(7)结局：过了一段时间；事情有了最后的转折(8)总结:点题，呼应前文第1步情绪：情绪描写第2步细节：进一步解释描写例1smilebrightly;laugh;beam;light(sth)up;lightupwith;burstintolaughter;burstoutlaughing;wearabright/broadsmile;givesbasmile细节描写：笑看到直升飞机，Jane高兴地笑了起来。(I)Atthesightofthehelicopter,Janebeamedwithwildjoy.(2)Seeingthehelicopter,Janebeamedwithwildjoy.(3)Themomentshecaughtsightofthehelicopter,Jane,seays/facelitupwithdelight.(4)Themomentshecaughtsightofthehelicopter,abrightsmilelitupJane'sfaceleyes.【例2】情绪描写二哭cry;sob;weep;burstintotears;burstoutcrying;(one'seyes)brimwith/befullof/befilledwithtears细节描写：哭(I)Alumpcametohisthroat.他哽咽欲哭。(2)HereyeswereredfromCrying.她的双眼哭得通红。(3)Hereyesbrimmedwithtears.她的眼里满含泪水。(4)TearscoursedtrickledslreamedrandownherCheekS.眼泪沿着她的面颊流下来。【例3】情绪描写：害怕frightened;panicked;scared;speechlessjin(a)panic;inacoldsweat;befulloffear;befilledwithterror;berootedtothespot;freeze;runaway;flee;one'skneesfeelweak;(hands)sweat细节描写：害怕我感到很害怕。(I)Ifeltveryfrightened/scared/panicked.(2)Iwasin(a)panic/wasfulloffear.(3)1stoodrootedtothespot,brimmingwithfear/filledwithfear.(4)1feltsoscaredthatmythroattightenedandmykneesfeltweak.(5)1frozewithterror,tooscaredtomove.(6)1wasseizedbyastrongsenseofhorror;mypalmssweating.例4情绪描写：高兴激动v.dance;jump/leapwithjoy;feelasurgeofhappiness/delight/joyexcitemerit;whistle;beovercomewithhappinessdelightjoyexcitement(one,seyes)twinkle;(one'sheart)beat/poundwildlyadj.happy;delighted;overjoyed;excited;thrilled;wildwithjoy细节描写：高兴激动当她知道考试结果时，她兴奋极了。(1)Whensheknewtheresultofthetest,shefeltexcited/thrilled.(2)Whensheknewtheresultofthetest,hereyestwinkledwithexcitement.(3)Whensheknewtheresultofthetest,herheartwaspoundingwithwildjoy.(4)Whensheknewtheresultofthetest,awildexcitementtookholdofher.(5)Knowingtheresultofthetest,shefeltasurgeofexcitement.(6)Knowingtheresultofthetest,shewasovercomewithexcitement.例5情绪描写：伤心痛苦sad;bitter;sorrowful;feelasurgeofsadness;(sadness)surgewithinsb;one'sheartache;beovercomewithsadness细节描写：伤心痛苦她伤心不已。(1) Samfeltextremelysad.(2) Asadnesscameoverher.(3) Herheartached,tearsstreamingdownhercheeks.(4) Numbwithgrief,shebecamespeechless.(5)Feelingasurgeofsadness,shecouldn,thelpcryingbitterly.(6) Sadnesssurgingwithinher,sheburstintotears.例6情绪描写：生气愤怒felt/getangry/furious;feelasurgeofanger/rage/fury;eyesblaze;stormoutof7intooff;storm/sayangrily;sthmakessbbloodboil;sthmakessbextremelyangry;claspone'sfists/teeth;speechless细节描写：生气愤怒Sam感到非常生气。(1) Samfeltveryangry.(2) Samstoodrootedtothespot,hiseyesblazingwithanger.(3) Samfeltsoangrythathestormedoutoftheroom,slammingthedoorfuriouslybehindhim.(4) Boilingwithrage,Samshookhisfistatme.(5)Filledwithfury,Samwasunabletoutterasingleword.第3步转折：个人努力或借助外界【例7】鼓起勇气；他人的鼓励pluckup/take/gatherone'scourage(todo.)毫不犹豫(1) sbcouldhardlywaittodosth(2) withoutasecondthought(3) withouteventhinking(4) withoutdelay(5) withouthesitation第4步转机：事情似乎有了转机，并抱有希望，感到欣慰例8似乎(1) Itwaslikedoingsth(2) Itseemedasif7that希望(1) hopingthat.(2) see/feelaglimmerofhope(3) tryinghardtodosth欣慰(1)breathedasighofrelieAsighedwithrelief松了一口气(2)(awaveofrelieffloodedthrough/washedoversb(3)toOne'srelief.使人欣慰的/放心的是第5步失望：但是问题还未解决或出现了新问题例9不幸的是(1)butbadluckforsb,(2),butinvain(3),butwithoutsuccess(4),butnouse不知道做什么(l)sbdidsth,wonderingwhattodonext.(2)sbdidsth,notknowingwhattodonext.(3)sbdidsth,unsureofwhattodonext.(4)sbwasatalosswhattodo.(5)sbwasinadilemmaaboutwhethertodoornot.第6步想法：突然有了一个想法（一句话说明这个想法）【例10】某人想到/明白甫了主意(I)Itsuddenlyoccurredtosbthat+从句-Ithitsbthat+从句-Itstrucksbthat+从句-Itdawnedonsbthat+从句(2)(idea,thought.)occurredcametosb=.cameflashedintoone'smind-.crowdedinone,smind(3)one,smindbegantorace第7步结局：过段时间，事情有了最后的转折例11过了一段时间(1)notlongafterthat,=shortlyafterwards,.-befbrelong,.=Itdidn'ttakelongbefore+从句=Ittooksometimebefore+从句foraninstant/moment事情有了转折(I)Toone,ssurprise(delight)Strangelyenough,itturnedoutthat+从句(2)Butonsecondthoughts,.(3)Butwhathappenednextwaspuremagic.第8步总结：点题，呼应前文例12直到才意识到(1)倒装句：NotUntil+时间状语+didsbrealize/noticethat+从句(2)强调句：ItwasOnIy+时间状语+thatsbrealizedIhat+从句还记得某人的话;还在某人的脑海中(1) One'swords(echoedrangout)inone'sears.(2) One,swords/voice/songIingeredwhisperedinone,smind/head.(3)One'sheadwasstillfullof.经历与教训(1)Whata/anvaluable/useful/great/painfullessonsbtaughtme/sblearnedfromsb!(2)Whata/anenjoyablepleasantwonderfulunforgettablememorable/interesting/valuableexperiencesbhad!(3)Downdeepinone,sheat.在某人的内心深处第二部分“八步法”实战应用：高考真题讲解故事梗概：夫妻旅游途中吵架，妻子独自离开，述路在树林里，直升飞机来了几次授救但没有看见她。她感到很失望。阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstoCamDovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTOm.'Tmgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp"andwalkedaway.WithnopathtofolIowJanejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.AftershehadClimbedtoahighplace.sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tbhersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!"shecried."Help!"Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling（滴落）somewherealadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.TOhergreatioy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow.Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Paragraph1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Paragraph2ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.第一段：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain”但是没有直升机来了，天又黑了。）读后续写续写LAwaveofterrorsweptoverher.一阵恐怖的浪潮席卷了她。L情绪2.Herheartpoundingfiercelyandherpalmsweating,aninnervoicetoldherthatshehadtofindasafeplace.她的心剧烈地跳动着，手心冒汗，一个内在的声音告诉她，她必须找到一个安全的地方。2.细节：详述情绪3.Tiredandterrifiedasshewas,Janepluckedhercouragetofeeltheway.虽然她很累，也很害怕，但简鼓起勇气去感受这条路。3.转折：个人努力4 .Luckily,itdidn'ttakelongbeforeshefoundacave.5 .Sighingwithrelief,shefeltaglimmerofhope,sayingtoherself.nTomorrowisanotherday."4 .幸运的是，没过多久她就找到了一个洞穴。5 .松了一口气，她感到了一丝希望。对自己说。“明天又是新的一天转机：成功、希望来了。Withthat,shewenttosleep,inwhosedreamherhusbandkepthercompany.说完，她就去睡觉了，她丈夫在梦里陪伴着她。衔接句第二段：ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeIIP.简醒来的时候天已经亮了。读后续写续写1.Hungryanddisappointed,shefoundnotanyhelicopteroverhead,atalosswhattodo.1.饥饿和失望,她发现头顶上没有任何直升机，不知所措。再度失望（出现新问题）1. Itsuddenlydawnedonherthatsheshouldfindabigopenareafirst.3. Havinggobblingdownsomeblackberries,shecan'twaittosetoff.4. Afterwhatseemedacentury,suchanareadidcomeintosight.1.Herfacebrightenedup.2.她突然明白，她应该先找一个大的空地。1.她狼吞虎咽地吃了些黑莓，迫不及待地要出发了。4 .好像过了一个世纪之后，这样的地区确实出现了。5 .她的脸变亮了。突然有了办法6. Whatacoincidencethatmeanwhile,ahelicopterwasflyingtowardsher.7. Uponitslanding,outdashedherhusbandwhohuggedJanetightly,tearswellingupintheirheart.6 .与此同时,一架直升机正朝她飞来，真是巧合。7 .她的丈夫紧紧地拥抱着简，眼泪涌上心头。结果解决问题，巧不成书，皆大欢喜8.Itwasatthemomentthattheydecidednottoquarrelanymorebutlearnedtocompromise.8.就在这时,他们决定不再争吵了，而是学会了妥协（总结）